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17 April 2007 @ 06:19 pm
Oh Frabjeous Day!  
I have written a drabble! Huzzah for me! I didn't think I could do it, but it turns out I can!

By Dyce

The women of Serenity differ markedly each from the others. Jayne isn't a man given to poetical thoughts, but somewhere in the back of his mind he imagines them as differing flavours of sweetness.

Kaylee is ripe peaches, soft and sun-warm, uncomplicated and fresh.

Inara is cinnamon candy, smooth and heated, but hard and too sickly for his taste.

Zoe is chocolate with a bitter edge, appealing but too rich for him.

River... River is oranges, sharp acid and sweetness mingled, fire in a wound and smelling like sunlight feels.

Jayne's always liked peaches... but he's learning to appreciate oranges.
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Falstafffalstaff_eg on April 17th, 2007 09:17 am (UTC)
Very nice. I like all the 'tastes,' which fit their ladies perfectly -- especially Kaylee and River; I never would've thought of peaches or oranges for them, and I think you hit just the right note with those.

Also, I'm very pleased you were able to write a drabble. I'm not surprised -- there doesn't seem to be anything, writing-wise, that you're genuinely unable to do.

And that last line is really nice -- hinting at so much, but said so succinctly. I have a very, very talented wife. Good work, honey.
vampdiva18 on April 17th, 2007 09:48 am (UTC)
I love the concept of different tastes for the women of Serenity. I think you've got them all spot on.
Missy: river | graceful damn heroever_obsessed on April 17th, 2007 10:03 am (UTC)
Yay, using Jayne's taste obsession for Rayne! Inara was just perfect, truly, the description and the 'hard and sickly' were perticularely perfect, heh. Zoe was the other one that fit in every way, and River's? I think I want to bear your children for 'fire in a wound,' seriously. Your first drabble - I just wrote my first one a few weeks ago, and it was really hard, *g*
crazywriterchic: raynecrazywriterchic on April 17th, 2007 03:35 pm (UTC)
Yum. Now I'm hungry. In a non-sexual way!

But, yes, very good. Hard litte suckers, aren't they?
The Simi Formerly Known As MADJHsimi on April 17th, 2007 07:24 pm (UTC)
*grin* You've been soo corrupted! First smut? And now Drabbles? Oh Noes!

I like it. I really liked his description of Inara - was right in line with how I see her.
MysteriousAliWays: Firefly - Misbehavemysteriousaliwz on April 17th, 2007 11:54 pm (UTC)
The imagery is perfect.