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21 August 2010 @ 04:15 pm
Summer 2010 Challenge: Prompt #37  
Title: Sunshine in Rain
Author: gilove2dance
Prompt: #37 - "People don't notice whether it's winter or summer when they're happy." - Anton Chekov
Rating: G
Words: 464
Disclaimer: Joss is boss

A/N: I am so not happy with the ending of this but I am so so late.



"Gorrammit Mal! How could ya just leave her there?"

Mal flinched at Jayne's bellow. This anger, this rage, was something he expected from her brother Simon, not his supposed cold hearted mercenary.

"She got shot in the chest and we're just gonna run away? Scurry off to the black?" Jayne growled. "What happened to never leavin' a man stranded?"

Mal sighed. "The plan was –"

"Screw your gun hoe-tze bee dio-se plan! She is crew. Family." Jayne was looking more and more distressed. Mal could only stare incredulously at him. "What are you goin' to tell her brother? That we left her – her body to those shiong mao niao pisspots? She may have been still alive. We could have saved her, but we just..." He ran out of air and just waved dejectedly at the direction they had come from out the airlock.

Mal opened his mouth to reply but Jayne glared at him. Silence stretched between them, making the sound of the rain outside seem like the thundering of hooves.

He heard the shot before he saw it. Saw her crumple to the ground behind the crate before he heard the impact. Fear, guilt and anger bloomed in his chest painfully for a second before getting extinguished. Cool calm filled his head as he started firing at the enemy.

"Get in the mule, Jayne," called Mal, already starting up the vehicle.

"Riv—" started Jayne.

"Leave her. Get in the mule!" interrupted Mal harshly. Jayne, now livid, stared at the captain, unmoving. Mal cocked his gun. "Don't make me shoot you.

Jayne started for where River lay. "Jayne!" roared Mal. "I'll tell 'em what you did in Ariel. Get in the mule NOW!"


"Captain's plans would run smoother if he told everyone's parts to all."

Mal smiled at River as she stood in the rain at the foot of the airlock ramp. Jayne had froze, his eyes closed with the most peculiar expression on his face.

"Zoe's armor is most effective." River grinned at Mal. Jayne made a strangled noise before rushing out the airlock to sweep River up in what looked like a bone-crushing hug.

Mal continued to stare as Jayne grumbled something about her "bein' dead and don't never do that again Crazy Girl" and then promptly stared kissing her fiercely. He was about to pull his gun on the mercenary, when Mal suddenly noticed that River had wrapped her legs around the man’s waist and was kissing him back with the same amount of fierceness and passion.

The rain continued to fall, soaking the deadly pair, but they stayed oblivious to anything happening around them. Mal smiled crookedly and turned, walking through the cargo bay, wondering what form of food might still be lurking in the corners of the pantry.

 
 
Current Mood: mellowmellow
Current Music: To Build a Home by the Cinematic Orchestra
 
 
goddessofbirthgoddessofbirth on August 21st, 2010 08:21 pm (UTC)
Aw...faux angst cuteness! Stupid Mal should have told Jayne what was up. It's just not right to do that to a man, is it?? I think the ending is just fine!
gilove2dance: Angergilove2dance on August 21st, 2010 09:08 pm (UTC)
Thank you ^______^
It's been a very long time since I have written so I find my writing very...iffy and weird
RJrjsteamboat76 on August 21st, 2010 08:57 pm (UTC)
you should be happy with the ending! it was fantastic! =) the whole thing was great!
gilove2dance: Adam Baldwingilove2dance on August 21st, 2010 09:09 pm (UTC)
Aww! Thank you so much!! That means a lot ^___^
DorothyL: Beliefrevdorothyl on August 21st, 2010 09:08 pm (UTC)
I like it!
gilove2dance: Adam Baldwingilove2dance on August 21st, 2010 09:09 pm (UTC)
Thank you so much!!! ^_____^
SunshineAlisunshineali on August 21st, 2010 09:17 pm (UTC)
Hey, good to see you around. I know you're busy, but I always enjoy your fics. This was cute and I always like it when Mal gets surprised when they make out. I'm SO glad you didn't kill River. :)
gilove2dancegilove2dance on August 21st, 2010 09:24 pm (UTC)
You know me Ali, I can't kill anyone ^___^
Thank you so much, that means a lot to me...I am doing my best to de-stress and make more time for me but it doesn't always work so well.
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gilove2dancegilove2dance on August 21st, 2010 11:00 pm (UTC)
Thank you ^___^ I think it just didn't turn out the way I originally wanted so I am not sure about it
vt_browncoatvt_browncoat on August 22nd, 2010 12:04 am (UTC)
Great story... I was at first, "Wha? Linds is killing River?????!!!!! Then I read further and laughed. Great job.
gilove2dance: Angergilove2dance on August 22nd, 2010 12:07 am (UTC)
Hehe! Of course I couldn't! Although I would be more likely to kill River then Jayne :P
BlueEyedBrigadiergeneral_iblis on August 22nd, 2010 01:59 am (UTC)
Mighty Nice Bait 'N' Switch
Gotta say, gilove2dance, this was a mighty skillful little shell game you pulled off here, what with making us think Mal had abandoned River after she had been shot on a job and Jayne just barely avoiding the urge to kill Mal for what seems like a completely OOC moment from our Capt. Tightpants. Was gonna curse you out for being totally evil...but you managed to get out of it by a narrow margin ;D
gilove2dance: Adam Baldwingilove2dance on August 22nd, 2010 02:47 am (UTC)
Re: Mighty Nice Bait 'N' Switch
Heehee awesome reaction! Totally what I was going for ^____^
basched: Rayne1basched on August 22nd, 2010 05:34 am (UTC)
Lass, there was nothing wrong with that ending! I thought it was the perfect way to do so!

Duh, stoopid Mal not telling Jayne! Heck to be all honest I was a bit worrie myself, but Zoe's armour was a great touch!

Love the story!
gilove2dancegilove2dance on August 22nd, 2010 05:16 pm (UTC)
Thanks so much!!

I always get angry at Mal when I watch the Message because Tracey wouldn't have died if he had just told him the plan from the beginning!
basched: Rayne1basched on August 24th, 2010 10:26 am (UTC)

Y'know, I've always thought that as well. Silly Mal.
Pia: rayne-damagingmycalmidyllictorture on August 23rd, 2010 04:49 am (UTC)
I liked this, and great use of the prompt! :D And the ending was fine. No need to worry. Mal was just suffering from PTS after seeing the Rayne face suckage.
gilove2dance: Adam Baldwingilove2dance on August 23rd, 2010 12:14 pm (UTC)
Thank you so much ^______^